In my reflection I found five uses of the word "that", four of which were unnecessary.
A sentence written in the passive voice is, "For example, the digital story Patrick's Amazing Summer Vacation was created by
a student, Patrick, and describes his adventures that took place over the
summer." It should be, "For example, the digital story Patrick's Amazing Summer Vacation, is a video created by a student, Patrick, that describes his summer adventures."
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